I'm making another run at this story. Like the first time, it will just be a scene at a time until I either finish it, get lost or distracted, or write myself into a corner. This is one where I like the basic concept and the key characters, but I'm still feeling out the flow of events; I know where I want to go with it, but I'm not sure how best to get there. So, these first couple of scenes are going to be a repeat of the original setup, but I'm going to change things up as Pallian attacks the enemy camp and build from there. I don't want to push too hard on this -- that way lies burnout -- so it'll probably be a regular Friday feature until it isn't.  
Pallian stood at the crest of the hill, holding his mount by its reins, 
and watched as his older brother looked out over the likely battlefield 
below. 
It wasn't a good spot for either side, just a low valley with a wide 
creek across its center. High grasses alternated with clumps of 
scattered trees, and the dozen or so farms that occupied the area were 
rapidly being abandoned. On the far side, uniformed men organized into 
neat units occupied a matching ridge, and didn't seem any more inclined 
to descend into the valley than Pallian was. Still, they were a foreign 
army on his father's lands, and didn't seem likely to turn back without a
 fight.
"What do you think, Brother?" Ravaj was pale-skinned and dark-haired, 
with a lean, handsome face. He wore heavy armor and carried his helm in 
one gloved hand. 
From within his armor, Pallian inclined his head. Ravaj was the heir, 
and had been put in charge of this expedition to gain some experience in
 battle. There was no particular reason for him to seek the opinion of 
his youngest brother, but perhaps he was having a moment of uncertainty 
out here in the wilderness of the world, so very far away from the 
citadel and their father's protection. 
"Starting with the obvious? This is no simple farmers' rebellion." 
"No. And I do not like the look of that army." Ravaj glanced down. "Or this valley."
"It's a terrible battlefield," Pallian replied. "Advantage to the 
defender. Victory by attrition. Costly. I'd guess we have the advantage 
in sorceries, but they have the advantage in numbers."
"So we could win, and still be at a loss." Ravaj was nodding; he was 
pampered and sometimes cruel, but he wasn't a fool. "Perhaps that's what
 they want." Not when it came to matters of power.
Pallian frowned. "The best outcome for them is if we attack while they 
hold the far ridge. The same, in reverse, for us." He paused as an arrow
 slammed into his armor and shattered. It must have been ensorceled, to 
fly so far; but his armor was their father's work, an extension of his 
strength, and Pallian had yet to find anything that could pierce it. 
A second arrow tangled itself in his brother's sorcerous defenses; Ravaj
 laid a hand on the shaft, whispered new instructions, and sent it back 
to the archer that had loosed it. 
"Neither side will get that," said Ravaj, picking up the track of 
Pallian' thought. "So we'll either need to draw each other out, or keep 
each other distracted while we do something else." 
Pallian nodded. 
"We'll make camp here, set up defenses as best we can. We can send some 
skirmishers down to keep them occupied. Likely they'll do the same, and 
nothing much will come of it. You'll head south, cross the valley after 
dark, and hit them from behind. If you can get to their leaders, do it. 
If you can't, work through their stores and supply lines. If they don't 
have food, they'll have to move, and whichever way they go we can take 
advantage of it."
Pallian nodded again. "It will be done. Be careful while I'm gone, brother: they're likely thinking similar thoughts."
Ravaj considered that, then nodded. "Then they may be expecting you. I'll take extra precautions; you do the same." 
"As you command," said Pallian.
 
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