tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4446682073857250843.post1123098541266982844..comments2024-03-27T23:42:36.619-05:00Comments on Mock Ramblings: Short Fiction: Sick NoteMichael Mockhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/06233321050691782148noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4446682073857250843.post-73684379695644059662018-09-06T12:35:33.860-05:002018-09-06T12:35:33.860-05:00Yeah, this is why I should proofread instead of ju...Yeah, this is why I should proofread instead of just dashing something off and turning it loose. In my brain, he *was* roaming, but apparently my fingers went elsewhere. Michael Mockhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06233321050691782148noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4446682073857250843.post-59510601706679344572018-09-05T03:09:04.733-05:002018-09-05T03:09:04.733-05:00My inner proofreader cringed, so I have some corre...My inner proofreader cringed, so I have some corrections: <br /><br /><i>Four hours later, Bob roaming the street with blood in his mouth, and a doctor's note in his hand. A pack[of] his fellow infected, his few remaining co-workers among them, hunted with him.</i><br />"Roaming" should either be "was roaming" or "roamed"; present participles can't stand alone as primary verbs. You should also note where I inserted the word "of." Rhoadanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02375561352677522227noreply@blogger.com